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when i was little, i always thought that
you were supposed to shine
with light that came from some distant kingdom
that none has ever seen

they said you should have wings
snowy, white and feathered;
only the special ones may have more than two
offering protection within a downy shield

but I've grown up since that age of whispered stories
I've found that they were wrong
the light i see in you, glows brightly from inside
guiding me through this land of shadowed dark

not needing wings to lift me up,
always helping me to find my way back
to a smile. your kind words bring,
send, my ever falling heart into a world
worth living
written for :iconrawem0tion:'s theme "angel"

tell me <strike>if i suck</strike> if this needs work. :)
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:iconcrystalstormrunner:
crystalstormrunner Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2010
At a loss for words...beautiful is all i can really say.
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Artemisfire Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2010
thank you very much ^^
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TheCoalMineCanary Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
What a beautiful piece. :heart:
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:iconartemisfire:
Artemisfire Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008
thank you! :)
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TheCoalMineCanary Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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Heaven-CanWait Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2008
In my opinion though of course including the image of an angel (which was the actual theme :giggle:) this was different. Liked the child and its beliefs. . . you've written such a lovely piece!
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:iconartemisfire:
Artemisfire Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008
thank you very much, i din't really want to go for the obvious direct mention of an angel for this poem.
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:iconheaven-canwait:
Heaven-CanWait Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2008
I see, you're very welcome =)
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:iconartemisfire:
Artemisfire Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2008
thanks =)
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MaliceTear Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2008
"but I've grown up since that age of whispered stories
I've found that they were wrong"


Certainly the strongest lines of the piece.
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:iconartemisfire:
Artemisfire Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2008
thanks for your input =)
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:iconmalicetear:
MaliceTear Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2008
You're very welcome. :aww:
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ErilisVampyre Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2008
*smile* Nice work.
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Artemisfire Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2008
thanks :)
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Snow-Machine Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2008
So bright, cool, and calm. I've been banging on the keys in caps for the past ten minutes and this was like a soft, gentle pacifier. Nice imagery, nice narrative. Thank you.
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Artemisfire Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2008
glad i could help =D, and thank you very much.
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:iconmistyvision:
mistyvision Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2008
this definitely does not suck. i like it a lot. wonderful job :-)
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:iconartemisfire:
Artemisfire Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2008
thank you very much :)
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Nacome Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This one sounds oddly petable >.>
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Artemisfire Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2008
what do you mean by petable??? >.<
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:iconnacome:
Nacome Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Like... I could pet it if it was tangible... lol It's that precious
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Artemisfire Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2008
lol thanks. =D
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thewalkingangel Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2008
I like it, theres only one thing in it i would really change though, its the 'shadowed dark' part, it seems a little redundant..maybe just shadows, or something else..nothing coming to mind at the moment.

but i likes!
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:iconartemisfire:
Artemisfire Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2008
if it's redundant it's for emphasis silly! plus i like the way it sounds ;P
:hug: thanks for the fave =D
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:iconthewalkingangel:
thewalkingangel Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2008
ooooh.. okay ^_^

and welcome! :P
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